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Example of Helpful Comments
Storyboard
Volume: 4
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Writer: Steve
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Date Due: 9/16
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Section: Program & Project Management
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Subsection: 4.1
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Title: Kansas Army Ammunition Plant Support
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Theme: Staying on Track
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Pages: 2
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Importance: High
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File Name: manage.doc
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Tables/Art Notes/Sketches:
Put organization chart in this section.
No. Figures: 1 No. Tables: 0 No. Photos: 0
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Benefit Statement:
Just as the conductor is responsible for the running of a train, our program manager is responsible for running your program. Steve Smith is your conductor.
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Lead Paragraph:
As you have described the KAAP project in your announcement, we recognize that it is complex, difficult, and sensitive site work. We know this because we have been working at KAAP for the past 3 years with these same issues. The same team that you already know is ready to continue managing your projects.
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Supporting Paragraphs:
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- Steve Smith will be in charge and has been there since Day One!
- We know the background, regulatory issues, staffing issues, and problems that are going to come up. Part of good management is good communication. Discuss constant communication!
- Go into detail about our management approach. Give narrative of how our organization will function. Reference organization chart.
- Address staffing: keeping people motivated is a management challenge.
- Describe incident about remote-control drilling and DOT shipping requirements. Mention difficulty in shipping explosives and our knowledge in this area.
Example of Useless Comments
Storyboard
Volume: 4
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Writer: Steve
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Date Due: 9/16
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Section: Program & Project Management
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Subsection: 4.1
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Title: Kansas Army Ammunition Plant Support
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Theme: Staying on Track
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Pages: 2
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Importance: High
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File Name: manage.doc
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Tables/Art Notes/Sketches:
Put organization chart in this section.
No. Figures: 1 No. Tables: 0 No. Photos: 0
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Benefit Statement:
Just as the conductor is responsible for the running of a train, our
program manager is responsible for running your program. Steve Smith is
your conductor.
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Lead Paragraph:
As you have described the KAAP project in your announcement, we
recognize that it is complex, difficult, and sensitive site work. We
know this because we have been working at KAAP for the past 3 years
with these same issues. The same team that you already know is ready to
continue managing your projects.
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Supporting Paragraphs:
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- Steve Smith will be in charge and has been there since Day One!
- We know the background, regulatory issues, staffing issues, and problems that are going to come up. Part of good management is good communication. No!
- Go into detail about our management approach. Give narrative of how our organization will function. Reference organization chart.Weak
- Address staffing: keeping people motivated is a management challenge.
- Can't you give an example?
Example of Complete Storyboard
Storyboard
Volume: 4
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Writer: Steve
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Date Due: 9/16
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Section: Program & Project Management
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Subsection: 4.1
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Title: Kansas Army Ammunition Plant Support
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Theme: Staying on Track
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Pages: 2
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Importance: High
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File Name: manage.doc
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Tables/Art Notes/Sketches:
Put organization chart in this section.
No. Figures: 1 No. Tables: 0 No. Photos: 0
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Benefit Statement:
Just as the conductor is responsible for the running of a train, our
program manager is responsible for running your program. Steve Smith is
your conductor.
|
Lead Paragraph:
As you have described the KAAP project in your announcement, we
recognize that it is complex, difficult, and sensitive site work. We
know this because we have been working at KAAP for the past 3 years
with these same issues. The same team that you already know is ready to
continue managing your projects.
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Supporting Paragraphs:
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- Steve Smith will be in charge and has been there since Day One! Remind them what good things Steve has accomplished.
- We know the background, regulatory issues, staffing issues, and problems that are going to come up. Part of good management is good communication. DISCUSS CONSTANT COMMUNICATION!
- Go into detail about our management approach. Give narrative of how our organization will function. Reference organization chart.
- Address staffing: keeping people motivated is a management challenge.
- Describe incident about remote-control drilling and DOT shipping requirements. Mention difficulty in shipping explosives and our knowledge in this area.
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